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Somethings wrong


i cant turn


I cant stop


This cant be right





The sun is beating down


What a beautiful day


not a cloud in sight


dinner's waiting on the table





my head hits the sidewalk


with a deathly crunch


My skins pealing away


Pavement, thats my sight





My skin is burning


I feel warmth on my sholder


I hear his voice


he runs to my side, unstable





Its all sureal


Every thing is a blur


People asking questions


This must be a dream





He wishpers in my ear


Youll be okay


They will be hear any second


So brave he was





Never left my side


Holding my hand


While tears rolled down my face


He said he loves me





I wake up


In the recovery room


My neck and hip were cut open


Now i understand all the fuss





It wasnt a dream


It was my life


I was watching in disbelief


Its something that now repeats


Every time i Sleep





So i wrote this poem about an accident i had and how caring my boyfriend was . he enjoys my poems i just wanted to know what u though

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nice poem
Reply:sound really good
Reply:Wow! That was really good!
Reply:i think that is very well thought out. its really good...wish i could write like that... i love poems, love writing them but i have to really think about wat im writting.
Reply:it nice